I enjoyed watching your elevator pitch. You are an eloquent speaker and your tone and pace are appropriate. Your body language was good, though at times I found myself focusing too much on your hands instead of your face; I believe this was an artifact of the placement of the camera. On that regard, my first recommendation to improve your pitch is to change the camera placement: next time, try placing the camera at eye-level. Doing so, you won’t be looking down, which can seem dismissive. Also, it would put the focus in your face instead of your hands. Back to your speech, I liked the rhetorical questions and your use of facts to support your argument. One last note: I would spend a little more time on your idea, as it is not completely clear what your product is. Nevertheless, great job with your first pitch and looking forward the next ones!
I thought you did a great job with your elevator pitch. You were confident, dressed the role, and sold the pitch great to the investors. I think you did a great job at using hand signals to place emphasis on certain statements you were stating regarding the subject. I liked how you used different hooks to get the investors interested in many ways and ultimately i think it helped your pitch. This is just the beginning and I bet that as we move forward the pitches will get even better and more fluent. Overall, great job.
Overall, I think you did a great job on your elevator pitch. You seemed very cool, calm and collected but also confident with your posture and tone of voice. You also looked the part and did a nice job of using the appropriate hand gestures. My only two recommendations would be to find a different camera angle, as I think placing it at eye-level would feel more direct and engaging for the audience and speaking a bit louder because it was somewhat hard to hear you at times. Nice work!
Caelan,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed watching your elevator pitch. You are an eloquent speaker and your tone and pace are appropriate. Your body language was good, though at times I found myself focusing too much on your hands instead of your face; I believe this was an artifact of the placement of the camera. On that regard, my first recommendation to improve your pitch is to change the camera placement: next time, try placing the camera at eye-level. Doing so, you won’t be looking down, which can seem dismissive. Also, it would put the focus in your face instead of your hands. Back to your speech, I liked the rhetorical questions and your use of facts to support your argument. One last note: I would spend a little more time on your idea, as it is not completely clear what your product is. Nevertheless, great job with your first pitch and looking forward the next ones!
Hey Caelan,
ReplyDeleteI thought you did a great job with your elevator pitch. You were confident, dressed the role, and sold the pitch great to the investors. I think you did a great job at using hand signals to place emphasis on certain statements you were stating regarding the subject. I liked how you used different hooks to get the investors interested in many ways and ultimately i think it helped your pitch. This is just the beginning and I bet that as we move forward the pitches will get even better and more fluent. Overall, great job.
Hey Caelan,
ReplyDeleteOverall, I think you did a great job on your elevator pitch. You seemed very cool, calm and collected but also confident with your posture and tone of voice. You also looked the part and did a nice job of using the appropriate hand gestures. My only two recommendations would be to find a different camera angle, as I think placing it at eye-level would feel more direct and engaging for the audience and speaking a bit louder because it was somewhat hard to hear you at times. Nice work!